She. (Rebellious Portrait)

she isn’t sorry.

tap tap tap
she attacks the tabletop
relentlessly;
blue-painted missiles target
oiled hazelnut craftsmanship
in staccato rhythms.

she isn’t sorry.

she looks at me, a pink bubble
growing
between cherry lips ~
growing, Growing;
defiance in her stare,
challenge extended;
(GROWING)
tap tap tap

POP

the pink-smeared smile
doesn’t touch her
(tap tap tap)
eyes.
her tongue snakes out,
gathers
the sticky, playful rebellion.
teeth start chomping again.

she leans back with aΒ huff,
old chair complaining
at the sudden movement.

she isn’t sorry.

tap tap tap
i wait.

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Brian Miller over at dVerse Poets Pub invites us to focus on the details today… an interesting challenge.
Come join us at the bar!

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28 thoughts on “She. (Rebellious Portrait)

  1. ha – you really made me see her – cool on the breaks and space you give the poem by including the parenthesis and then continuing…

    the pink-smeared smile
    doesn’t touch her
    (tap tap tap)
    eyes.

    • awh, thanks, Susan! i’m sure i have a Ton of catching up to do on your blog… haven’t really had the time reading lately, but now i got a cup of tea ready and i’m soo looking forward to the visit πŸ™‚

  2. Oooo…. if there’s one thing I really do dislike and that is chewing gum. Always have, always will. It seems so rude too, the way people chew it and show it all as they chew it. Yes, I agree, sometimes it’s done with total disrespect too. Woe betide Chloe if this was her! LOL

  3. Well, I have read some of the other comments by now….but even if I hadn’t I would say in response: Sounds just like an early adolescent. They are generally NOT sorry! Well captured.

  4. The comments helped understand your poem. I read it again and really enjoyed it. At first, I thought it was an angry craftsman working at a piece of furniture. I am so dull.
    It was fun during the second read — thanx.

  5. I’m thinking it’s a rebellious teenager having a staredown with a parent. Loved the bubble gum blowing while the eyes stay fixed…no hint of a smile in them…no, she’s not sorry! Love it, Miriam!

  6. Ah a real stare down. Patience patience, the one who says anything looses. I can see the scene. A minor detail,caught my eye. The second isn’t seems to be a little wrong πŸ™‚

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